A poem, the magic box

           

I will put in the box a piece of sun from the sunny sky,

I will put in the box a piece of snow from a snowy mountain,

I will put in the box  a zombie from zimbabwe.

I will put in the box a piece of paper that can wave,

I will put in the box a hat that can swim,

I will put in the box a water bottle that can run a marathon

I will put in the box, a person walking at full speed,

I will put in the box, a box with purple paint and a star on the outside,

I will put in the box,  a elegant  star from the night sky.

I will put in the box,  a piece of the darkest night sky,

I will put in the box,  a piece of the slimiest slime that feels like a bulls eye,

I will put in the in the box, a piece of hair that feels like the finest silk.  

This is my poem that I made all of my class mates made the same one but different writing
i is about what you would put in your box but you put simile,metaphor,personification, and alliteration
Please give me some feedback Billie.